Haiku – Revise

For: Heeding Haiku with Chèvrefeuille and Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie

 

Dear friends of MLMM,

Welcome at a new episode of Heeding Haiku With … This week I love to challenge you to “revise” a haiku written by one of the classical haiku poets. I have chosen a wonderful haiku by Matsuo Basho (1644-1694) in a translation by my dear friend and mentor Jane Reichhold.

Let the haiku speak to you, become one with the haiku, the scene described, be part of that wonderful mind of Basho. Here is the haiku by Basho to revise:

knowing it first
on the famous musician’s flute
a snowstorm of flowers

© Basho (1677) (tr. Jane Reichhold)

I have tried to “revise” this one too, but I wasn’t very successful with it:

spring wind
torn apart Sakura blossoms –
a bamboo flute 

© Chèvrefeuille

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  • master’s melody
    blossom petals on flute air
    enchanted soft call

Hélène Vaillant ©Haiku

 

 

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